정규회화과정 Level 7-8 : Unit 26. I’m So Embarrassed. STEP 4. 1:1 글쓰기

Today’s Topic

When was the last time you were really embarrassed? What happened? How did you eliminate the embarrassment?

 

Writing / 정필규 2021. 10. 11

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As you know, because of pandemic the world is panic nowadays. The government publish that how many people affected corona virus every day for a wake up call for people. Fortunately, I got the first corona 19 pfizer vaccine about a month ago and I got the second vaccine a few days ago. So, I am not related with corona virus infection anymore. I don't have to worry about the infection. By the way, I had a wired situation before I got the second vaccine. I have been preparing for wedding. I was searching for home appliances at lots of places. Department store, Road shop, etc. Because I am not familiar with calculating money and selecting what kinds of appliances, that trip made me be tired. That's why I and My girl friend feels like getting cold. So, We considered corona virus test, of course, together. Even if the test station which is drive through was started at 9 a.m., there were so many waiting people for the test. We should wait too long. At this point, a car cut in line forward my car. I was really embarrassed but I can not do anything without horn blowing.

 

Revised Writing

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As you know, because of (the) pandemic(,) the world is (in) panic nowadays. The government publish that how many(announces the number of) people affected corona virus(by the coronavirus) every day for(as) a wake up(wake-up) call for people. Fortunately, I got the first corona 19 pfizer(my first COVID-19 Pfizer) vaccine about a month ago(,) and I got the second vaccine a few days ago. So,(So) I am not related with corona virus(that concerned with the coronavirus) infection anymore. I don't have to worry about the infection. By the way, I had a wired(weird) situation before I got the second vaccine. I have been preparing for (my) wedding. I was searching for home appliances at lots of places. Department store, Road shop,(places: department stores, road shops,) etc. Because I am not familiar with calculating money and selecting what kinds of appliances, that trip made me be(x) tired. That's why I and My girl friend feels(my girlfriend felt) like getting (a) cold. So, We(So we) considered corona virus(getting a coronavirus) test, of course, together. Even if the test station(,) which is(was a) drive through was started(drive-through, opened) at 9 a.m., there were so many waiting people for the test. We should(had to) wait (for) too long. At this point, a car cut in line forward(in front of) my car. I was really embarrassed(,) but I can(could) not do anything without horn blowing.(aside from blowing my horn.)

 

Re-Writing / 정필규

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As you know, because of the pandemic, the world is in panic nowadays. The government announces the number of people affected by the coronavirus everyday as a wake-up call for people. Fortunately, I got my first COVID-19 Pfizer vaccine about a month ago, and I got the second vaccine a few days ago. So I am not that concerned with the coronavirus infection anymore. I don't have to worry about the infection. By the way, I had a weird situation before I got the second vaccine. I have been preparing for my wedding. I was searching for home appliances at lots of places: department stores, road shops, etc. Because I am not familiar with calculating money and selecting what kinds of appliances, that trip made me tired. That's why I and my girlfriend felt like getting a cold. So we considered getting a coronavirus test, of course, together. Even if the test station which was a drive-through, opened at 9 a.m., there were so many waiting people for the test. We had to wait for too long. At this point, a car cut in line in front of my car. I was really embarrassed, but I could not do anything aside from blowing my horn.

 

문법 & 문장 교정

• Person A and B met before.
  • BETTER Person A and B have met before.
• I should have prepare this class.
  • BETTER I should have prepare for this class.
• It makes me feel better.
  • BETTER I feel good. (SIMILAR)