English Writing Practice

[EWP] 정규회화과정 Level 7-8 : Unit 17. I’m Having a Housewarming Party. STEP 4. 1:1 글쓰기

anothel 2021. 6. 28.

Today’s Topic

Some people like having housewarming parties. Others do not like them. How about you? Give details to support your opinion.

 

Writing / 정필규 2021. 05. 31


I like having housewarming parties. Because the party is meaning that starting life at this house from now on and friends can congratulate about this. In my case, I like gathering my people. Two years ago, for example, I was being English study group. We lent a room for studying and when it was finished, I told them, "Okay, so how about studying in my house?". And then, they visit my house once a week, we studied every week without missing. During that time, I made housewarming party in my house, and it is so nice memory. If someone like meeting people, they don't have reason for hating housewarming parties.

Okay, these days, situations is changed. In Korea, nobody can have gathering more four because of virus. Of course, that situation is applied to the world. In case of India, they ignore about power of virus, got disaster. How about in you country? You good? By the way, because of virus, the studying group was finished. We are not able to gather, I was scared corona.

Finally, liking of housewarming parties depends on situations such as virus(corona). I like that party still, but because of virus, I should hate it.

 

Revised Writing


I like having housewarming parties.(X) B(b)ecause the party is meaning that starting life at this house from now on and friends can congratulate about this (means starting a new life in this house and friends can celebrate that). In my case, I like gathering (with) my people. Two years ago, for example, I was being (in an) English study group. We lent (rented) a room for studying and when it was finished, I told them, "Okay, so how about studying in my house?" And then, they visit(ed) my house once a week, (and) we studied every week without missing (a day). During that time, I made (held a) housewarming party in my house, and it is so (was such a) nice memory. If someone like(s) meeting people, they don't have (will have no) reason for hating housewarming parties.


Okay, these days, (that) situation s(X) is changed (changing). In Korea, nobody can have (a) gathering (of) more (than) four because of (the) virus. Of course, that situation is applied to the world. In case of India, they ignore(d) about (the) power of virus, got disaster (so they suffered for it). How about in you (your) country? You (Is everything) good? By the way,(X) because of (the) virus, the studying group was finished. We are (were) not able to gather,(.) I was scared corona (of the coronavirus).


Finally, liking of(X) housewarming parties depends on situations such as virus(corona) (virus (coronavirus)). I like that party still, but because of (the) virus, I should hate it.


Thank you so much for writing this entry! We can see your great effort in writing. There are some mistakes, but since you were able to finish this, we believe it is already a success. Just study the corrections and the following reminders:


SIMPLE PAST

Use the simple past tense, [verb]+d/ed, when an action is done at a specific time in the past:

I have gone to Austria two years ago. INCORRECT

                   (two years ago is a specific time in the past)

I went to Austria two years ago. CORRECT

 

VERBS: Time Expressions for Present Continuous
PATTERN: am/is/are + verb~ing

(Notice that the time expression can come at the start or at the end of the sentence.)

At the moment: I’m watching TV at the moment.
These days: Paul is living in Cardiff these days.
Now: What are you doing now?
Nowadays: I think you are smoking too much nowadays.

 

so vs. such

We use so before an adjective or adverb (without a noun)

    She was so beautiful. (= She was very beautiful.)

    He ran so quickly. (= He ran very quickly.)

 

We use such before a noun or an adjective + a noun. If there is a or an, it goes after such.

    She was such a beautiful woman. (= She was a very beautiful woman.)

    (X) She was a so beautiful woman

    (X) She was a such beautiful woman.

    He got such a good time in the race. (= He got a very good time in the race.)

    It was such delicious food. (= It was really delicious food.)

 

Starting a sentence with “because”

The reason you can’t usually start a sentence with “because” is that the sentence needs two parts for because to join together: “because” clause (or dependent clause) and independent clause.

*We decided to go to the pool because it was hot outside. (correct)

*We decided to go to the pool. Because it was hot outside. (incorrect)

 

WHEN can we start a sentence with “because”:

If we start a clause with “because,” insert a comma and then a second clause, As an example:

*Because it was hot outside, we decided to go to the pool. (correct)

Since both of the clauses are in the same sentence, they aren’t alone and the sentence is technically correct.

 


We hope these tips will help you a lot. Keep on expressing your ideas in English and keep on writing! :)

 

Re-Writing / 정필규


I like having housewarming parties because the party means starting a now life in this house and friends can celebrate that. In my case, I like gathering with my people. Two years ago, for example, I was in an English study group. We rented a room for studying and when it was finished, I told them, “Okay, so how about studying in my house?” And then, they visited my house once a week, and we studied every week without missing a day. During that time, I held a housewarming party in my house, and it was such a nice memory. If someone likes meeting people, they will have no reason for hating housewarming parties.
Okay, these days, that situation is changing. In Korea, nobody can have a gathering of more than four because of the virus. Of course, that situation is applied to the world. In case of India, they ignored the power of virus, so they suffered for it. How about in your country? Is everything good? By the way because of the virus, the studying group was finished. We were not able to gather. I feared the coronavirus.
Finally, liking housewarming parties depends on situations such as virus(coronavirus). I like that party still, but because of the virus, I should hate it.

 

문법 & 문장 교정


  • Person A was invited from B for housewarming party of B.
    • BETTER Person A was invited from B's housewarming party.
  • Person A gonna go to housewarming party.
    • BETTER Person A will go to housewarming party.
  • I'll have to check with my wife first.
    • BETTER I will notify my wife first about this. (SIMILAR)

 

마무리


동사의 과거형, 현재 진행형 그리고 so와 such의 사용 시기의 차이점, becuase의 사용법에 대해서 설명을 해주셨다. 선생님 참 친절한 편. 제 짧은 영어 에세이 읽어주셔서 감사합니다 선생님.

쌓인 전화영어 글쓰기가 산더미라서 조금 더 일찍 출근해서 글 쓰고 복습하고 정리하고 포스팅까지, 대체 한하고 쌓아놓은 일들은 언제쯤 끝이 보이려나 싶다.

 

 

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