English Writing Practice

[EWP] 정규회화과정 Level 7-8 : Unit 18. Thank You for the Invitation. STEP 4. 1:1 글쓰기

anothel 2021. 6. 28.

Today’s Topic

What is the best way to invite someone to a special event like a wedding or a birthday party? Give details to support your answer.

 

Writing / 정필규 2021. 06. 01


Here are three kinds of answer.

First way to invite someone is using smartphone. These days, nobody doesn't have smartphone which has KakaoTalk(which is most famous chatting app in Korea). So, we can send invitation as smartphone easily. If you make invitation, and then you can send whoever as KakaoTalk in Korea. But, sometimes we can find who doesn't have KakaoTalk. Just at that time, you can send iMessage if you use iPhone. Anyway, one important thing is sending as smartphone.

Second way to invite someone is using SNS(facebook, instargram, etc.). These days, finding who doesn't doing SNS is too hard. If you have any special event, you can notify that event as writing on a SNS. But, still you can find who doesn't use smartphone or doesn't doing SNS. At this situation, you can use this.

Final way to invite someone is making invitation card. This way is best simple. But, The simple is the best. Also, you can pour your true heart into the card. You can send it as post and you can give card to someone as face to face. At that time you can give them other also. For example, emotion or other word.

 

Revised Writing


Here are three kinds of answer(s).


First (The first) way to invite someone is using (a) smartphone. These days, nobody doesn't have (a) smartphone which (that) has KakaoTalk(which is most famous chatting app in Korea). So,(X) we can send (an) invitation as (via) smartphone easily. If you make (an) invitation, and then(X) you can send (it to) whoever as (on) KakaoTalk in Korea. But,(X) sometimes we can find (someone) who doesn't have KakaoTalk. Just at that time, you can send (an) iMessage if you use (an) iPhone. Anyway, one important thing is sending as (via) smartphone.


Second (The second) way to invite someone is using SNS(f(F)acebook, instargram (Instagram), etc.). These days, finding (someone) who doesn't doing (have) SNS is too hard. If you have any special event, you can notify that event as writing on a (by writing a post on your) SNS. But,(X) still you can find (someone) who doesn't use (a) smartphone or doesn't doing (have) SNS. At (In) this situation, you can use this.


Final (The final) way to invite someone is making (an) invitation card. This way is best simple (this simplest). But,(X) The simple is the best (simple is best). Also, you can pour your true heart into the card. You can send it as (via) post(,) and you can give (the) card to someone as(X) face to face. At that time(,) you can give them other also. For example, emotion or other word. (things too like your feelings or other messages.)


Hi! Great job in finishing Step 4. We appreciate your time and effort. The ideas in your essay are described clearly. Thumbs up! Remember to take note of all our grammar corrections, as well as the proper usage of vocabularies. You can do it! See you! :D

 

Re-Writing / 정필규


Here are three kinds of answers.

The first way to invited someone is using a smartphone. These days, nobody doesn’t have a smartphone that has KakaoTalk(which is most famous chatting app in Korea). So, we can send an invitation via smartphone easily. If you make an invitation, you can send it to whoever on KakaoTalk in Korea. But sometimes we can find someone who does not have KakaoTalk. Just at that time, you can send an iMessage if you use an iPhone. Anyway, one important thig is sending via smartphone.

The second way to invite someone is using SNS (Facebook, Instagram, etc.). These days, finding someone who does not have SNS is too hard. If you have any special event, you can notify that event by writing a post on your SNS. But still, you can find someone who does not use a smartphone or does not have SNS. In this situation, you can use this.

The final way to invite someone is making an invitation card. This way is this simplest. But simple is best. Also, you can pour your true heart into the card. You can send it via post, and you can git the card to someone face to face. At that time, you can give them other things too like your feelings or other messages.

 

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마무리


정관사 a/an이나 the에 집중해서 터칭을 해주셨다. 앞으로 정관사에 대해서 좀 더 조심해서 쓰도록 할게요. 알려주셔서 고맙습니다. 선생님^_^

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